The Dry Taste of Death

[krickets]

Not really sure where this is coming from. I have a strange fascination with Richard and his immortal self, so there may be more of him. (And maybe not.) Let me know what you think! :D

Title: The Dry Taste of Death
Fandom: LOST
Characters: Richard, Ben
WordCount: 100
Prompt: Inject
Summary: Post finale future. Richard sits in quiet judgement.



"You fucked it up this time."

Ben was supposed to be different. Ben was different, only far too human, selfish and cruel, and sad – too sad.

"Richard?"

He’s vulnerable, alone in the dark, and the name he calls isn’t right, never was. But Richard can’t even remember the first.

"You got it wrong."

"What?" Ben slurs, stirs, eyes adjusting to the darkness of the tent, the dry taste of death in his mouth, a grave shadow moving over him. He doesn’t even feel the pinprick.

"All wrong," he repeats. And after a moment, "I’m sorry."

Ben never hears this apology.

-fin

Comments

[slybrunette.livejournal.com]

Hello to the dark fic. Wow, that was good. So much packed into only 100 words.

Ben was supposed to be different. Ben was different, only far too human, selfish and cruel, and sad – too sad.

I like that line. So true.

Great job with this!

[crickets.livejournal.com]

I have no clue where this came from! But I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the comment. I think I was just thinking about Richard and how he'd make excellent fodder for fics and this sorta, came out. I'd like to do more with him. We'll see!

[gigglemonster.livejournal.com]

Oooohhhh, dark indeed!

That last line, LOVE it. He never hears the apology!

Wherever this came from, it was someplace pretty damn awesome!

[crickets.livejournal.com]

Haha I'm glad you think so. By the way, I got a MAJOR Jawyercita post-finale plot bunny.

[gigglemonster.livejournal.com]

SWEEEEEEET!
I LOVE YOU!

[crickets.livejournal.com]

I haven't written a word. But it's in there. *points to head*

[synalott.livejournal.com]

Love this. I'm really interested in the Others, in particular how Ben became their leader and the years in between Richard meeting young Ben and the purge.

Hope you write more. I like the dark.

[crickets.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I really do want to write more Richard. I think he's got so much potential as a character.

[wandaxmaximoff.livejournal.com]

Woohoo! Every fic needs more Richard!
Loved this little ficlet, and you description and characterization was spot on.

[crickets.livejournal.com]

Agreed. I'm really fascinated with his character. He makes for such good fic fodder. Though of course this is the first Richard fic I've written, but there are a lot more in my head! Hehe.

[wandaxmaximoff.livejournal.com]

Agreed, his character just screams out 'write fan fic about me'! lol
Can't wait to see what else you come up with about him, and for some more Richard love, you should check out my fan fic! (sorry, shameless promo there!)

[holycitygirl.livejournal.com]

He’s vulnerable, alone in the dark, and the name he calls isn’t right, never was. But Richard can’t even remember the first.

See that is what I like about the character. Richard is soo spooky with possibilities. I love that we don't know what he is.

:)

[crickets.livejournal.com]

Which is one of the reasons I'm so keen to explore his character via the marvelous fandomy world of fanfic. That line that you picked out? Is the ENTIRE reason I wrote this whole fic. That question of, how old is Richard and who is he really, is Richard his real name? How many has he gone by? Etc.

So yeah, Richard = Excellent fic fodder.

[uhzoomzip.livejournal.com]

i love the lost newsletter, because i somehow missed this! but for a drabble, this is creepily compelling. lovely job, babe!

[crickets.livejournal.com]

I know! The newsletter is awesome! There was SUCH a need for it! AndI'm glad you liked this and commented! I really do wanna write more Richard. Thanks a bunch! :D

[made-in-ink.livejournal.com]

This fic is excellent; sheer brilliance.

It has everything I love in a Lost fic; it's dark and features the Others. These are the best kind of fics to write (imo anyway as proved by my Goodwin/Alex fics) but they are always a pleasure to read. In fact this kind of fic is exactly what I love to pop up on my friends list so kudos.

Ben was different, only far too human, selfish and cruel, and sad – too sad.

Such a perfect sentence that sums up Ben and his 'leadership' of the Others and ties in somewhat with the growing discontent among the others at his recent decisions as portrayed at the end of this season.

Kudos

[crickets.livejournal.com]

Wow thanks so much! I'm glad you found these! They're definitely interesting to write that's for sure! I like dark/angsty pieces.

[augrah.livejournal.com]

oh my. This is love. Ben AND Richard. My life is complete!

[6degreesoflea.livejournal.com]

Ben was supposed to be different. Ben was different, only far too human, selfish and cruel, and sad – too sad.

He’s vulnerable, alone in the dark, and the name he calls isn’t right, never was. But Richard can’t even remember the first.
Wow. Great lines ;)

When I get my Richard/Nestor comm running you gotta come over and post Richard fics, okay? :) coz I have a strange fascination with him too.

[crickets.livejournal.com]

Thanks very much! I'll keep my eyes peeled for it! :D

[kellysparrow.livejournal.com]

I love this one too. I find your Richard to very much darker than we've seen of him, but very IC and I think this is just another side of him that we haven't seen yet.

I will definitely read more of your fics if they include Richard. And not just because I developed a huge crush on him since a few weeks back.

Do you mind if I friend you?

[crickets.livejournal.com]

Hehe I do love Richard. A lot.

And sure you can friend me! I'll be friending you as well!

There's another in this series... the last. Let me find it: Departure (http://crickets.livejournal.com/64350.html")

[kellysparrow.livejournal.com]

Thanks! Added you back.

Oh, I'll go on and read that right now :D

[kellysparrow.livejournal.com]

Oh, apparently the link doesn't work... I'll look it up :)